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Hate
That's all I see
Hate
All around me
Hate
Consuming peoples lives
Skin
Consuming peoples knives
Hate
seems heavier than love
Hate
Not coming from above
The lord tries to save us
He really does
From up above
We're all he loves
That's all I see
Hate
All around me
Hate
Consuming peoples lives
Skin
Consuming peoples knives
Hate
seems heavier than love
Hate
Not coming from above
The lord tries to save us
He really does
From up above
We're all he loves
Im not religeous but he really does try to save us. I know because he saved me
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"skin, consuming peoples knives" fucking love that line. Try this as a revision for the last line: The Lord tries to save us, No; he really does, The Lord tries to save us, We're all that's left to love.
I really liked how you repeated the word hate, it gets a point across, so I thought you should continue the theme in your last stanza. Really awesome poem, if you can't tell I'm really into it XD
I really liked how you repeated the word hate, it gets a point across, so I thought you should continue the theme in your last stanza. Really awesome poem, if you can't tell I'm really into it XD